Feb 1, 2009

Doomed, if caught!


I kept running and running. But, slowly and silently. It shouldn’t hear us! Otherwise we are doomed. The little girl stopped. I looked back and urged her to run. She refused. I know that she is tired. We have been running for past 20 mins. Looking for a place to hide. Looking for a place to save our lives. I looked back. It was coming. I can sense it. It’s looking for us. Eager to catch us.
I looked around. Finally I saw one building.
“C’mon girl. Run!”
“ I cant”
I just scooped her in my arms and dashed towards that building. Sensing my footsteps, it also followed. Panic gripped me.
We entered that building and I started searching for rooms with doors on it. But alas! It has already destroyed all the locks on it. How clever it has become. We stumbled upon something. It was the guy who helped us yesterday. Till yesterday he was alive. But today, no more than a lifeless disfigured body. I got used to it but I turned the face of the little one away. Again I heard it coming. We broke into a run again. Finally, we entered into one room. But there was no lock for this one also. I didn’t bother closing the door. It’s just too clever. I simply switched off the lights and pushed myself and her under the bed.
It also entered the building. It looked for us.
Kept looking into each room.
Finally it came in front of our room.
And it stopped!
It entered our room.
I waited for it to leave. We held our breaths. But I could listen to my heart hammering away so loudly that I feared that IT will hear it.
It started it way out of our room. I could sense it hunger! His hunger for us! Its evil look! Finally it left.
She heaved a sigh of relief. NO! I mouthed. It heard us. It came back. I closed her mouth. I could see the fear in her eyes. She was able to see the same emotion in mine!
It came near the bed. We could see its legs. It stopped right beside the bed. I could sense that it’s looking around for the source of sound! FOR US! Then it bends down to see what’s under the bed! Slowly I saw it bending down and down and down and
“WAKE UP! YOU ARE LATE FOR COLLEGE”
I woke up to see my mom bending down to wake me up. I got up and rubbed my eyes and looked around.
Darn! It was a dream!

PS : "IT" is actually a dinosaur! but I wanted to leave it to your imagination! Nothing much of writing out here. Just felt like penning it down and so I did. Hope you enjoyed it :) Do tell me how is it written !!

24 comments:

Chriz said...

voootu address kuduma kannaaaa... oootuku adiyaaal anupurein

Renu said...

you always build up well to a good climax:)

The Solitary Writer. said...

hehehe ...enna maa avala periya dinousaur un veetla eppdi fit aachi :p

kutti dinosaur kannavala vandhicha :p hehehe

i thot "IT " was a dog or a bear :p that was chasing u guys

any way good ......really good

Thoorika said...

@ Chriz

:D Its ok ... !! No need.. how is the build up by the way?! :P

Thoorika said...

@ Renu

Thank you once again :)

Thoorika said...

@ Stephen

he he.. it was not my house dude!!! thanks :)

Arv said...

Hiya... First time here...

I actually pictured a nice n' scary ghost :)

enjoyed the read...

take care and have a nice day... cheers...

Thoorika said...

Thanks arv !! Keep visiting :) Take care!

thomman said...

All right, lemme guess, you spent the night watching jurrassic park/godzilla/king kong and went to sleep. ;) :D

Who's the lil girl by the way?

Thoorika said...

:d None of it!! I never knew the reason behind that dream.. !! And i dunno tat lil girl either.. there was a lil boy also in my dream :D but i deleted him in this post!

ki said...

Well written!

I was in suspense till the very end!

I like. :)

Thoorika said...

you liked it :) Thanks ki !!

Karthik said...

IT I thought INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY and you are talking abt recession :P

Paa=ravala.. neraya post podala when i was absent :) Nee thaan DINOSAUR ke pal valkki, pen paakura VEERI aache.. idhellam jujupee....

Karthik said...

whats the answer for the quiz??? And i'll finish it in third part.. don't worry... Lik ROWLING told she cried while penning the 6th book climax, i cried while penning the climax... :( Choo choo.. No emoitions!!

Thoorika said...

Information Technology?! Recession?! Aanalum solanum.. ur imagination is hyper active!! Epdi ipdi ellam?!

"DINOSAUR ke pal valkki, pen paakura VEERI aache" - i didn't understand this line!!

Thoorika said...

@ Karthik : Endha quiz ode ans kekure?!

Karthik said...

The ISLAND quiz.. U put some carbon di oxide lie that na!!


It means U BRUSH DINOSAUR TEETH and TAKE BUGS FROM ITS HEAD!!!

nan said...

i knew it was a dream!but i though IT was a ghost!!!!!!! lol! good one

Thoorika said...

@ Karthik

Yuuuuuuck!!!!! dont use ur imagination in such a weird way!! pls!! and regarding the quiz.. it was an easy one.. chriz cracked it.. they used only those letters in that thing which, even if they are reversed, will look the same.. In short they have applied palindrome effect for the right white words and same for the left yellow words..

Thoorika said...

@ Nan

Someone commented !! :) happy to see that!!! Read my other stories and comment on it!!

Lancelot said...

i knew the ending when i started reading the story :P :P :P (becas Iread the ending first - briliant na?)

and i thought its a GHOSTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT

Thoorika said...

tats why I didnt disclose what "IT" was in the first place!! :)

Pretty Me!! said...

i was imagining some alien... :D

Thoorika said...

@ Pretty me!!!

ha ha.. !! :P